TP.
It was pretty decent. I do a lil sumthin in cyphers but nothin on wax. But heres some advice;
1. You might wanna try a different beat
2. Work on the adlibs.
3. And write it down! Dont put out your subpar stuff or you leave yourself open to negative criticism. If people still dont like your written stuff, then just think about this:
Do you do it for others? Or do you do it cause you love Hip Hop?